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Storybook: Ganesha's Home Life
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About Me Hi, my name is Logan Tibbetts. I am currently a Computer Science undergraduate at the University of Oklahoma. I plan to finish my Masters by spring 2020. My hobbies include solving twisty puzzles , and playing video and board games with friends. I am not a total hermit locked inside as I do go camping or hiking from time to time (although not as much as I should). The Rubik's Cube I got my first Rubik's Cube when I was 7 years old, and I have been hooked ever since. My desire to solve the Rubik's Cube quickly originally derived from simple competition with my older brother. However, I continued to solve them even after he stopped. I have only went to one official competition back in 2014 with a Single Best Time of 22.33s and an average of 28.23s ( My Record ). Unofficially my PB for a single solve is 14.72s. Twisty Puzzles...? It is a weird to call a Rubik's Cube a twisty puzzle, but that is what it is. I say this because there is a large amount of
Hi Logan! Your storybook is the first storybook project that I have seen! I think the topic you are doing your storybook project over is really interesting. There are so many things and different ways that you can take your storybook. Your introduction post helped a lot with remembering who Ganesha was. The picture and layout on your introduction post was really simple and easy to read, which I liked a lot. Also, I had no idea that Ganesha had the head of an Elephant! Have you thought about adding more information on the home page? You could add pictures from the stories you will share or even summaries of each story when you complete the entire storybook. Overall, I really enjoyed your storybook's appearance and the simplicity of the design. I look forward to reading more of your stories from your storybook project in the future. Good luck on the rest of your stories!
ReplyDeleteHey Logan! I love that you're doing your project over Ganesha. I wish that you'd talked a little bit more about the symbols shown in the picture of your introduction. Maybe you plan to add information about these in your stories? You did include links to read more about Ganesha, so maybe that's fair that you didn't mention everything. Overall, I think your storybook looks really nice. The photos are good and your home page is not entirely bare like some others I've seen. I don't think it would hurt to add another picture there though. I also wonder if it's necessary to include the link to the introduction. I will say, though, that I like that you pointed out the location for site navigation. It might be confusing to some people who've never used google sites before. I've read about Ganesha before, but it never really clicked that an elephant really would be the ideal animal to break through barriers. I'm glad you pointed that out! Nice job :)
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DeleteUnfortunately I ended up replacing the discussion of the symbols with more information on each of Ganesha's family members and their vahanas. Vahanas are really cool features of each god/goddess and I encourage you to look at the revised introduction now. There are even more cool pictures!
I currently don't know what I want to do with the homepage of the storybook, but I do like the idea of adding information from each of the stories to it.
Thank you for the feedback!
Hey Logan! I enjoyed reading your story about Ganesha. Growing up I have learned about him and was always fascinated with his story. I thought about researching him and his family for my project but decided to go with a portfolio instead. I'm glad you chose to research him though cause now I can still read and learn about him and his family! I never knew that there were traditions that gave women equal rights as men so it was interesting to learn a little bit about Shaktism. I also appreciate the link you included to these traditions. I noticed some spelling errors. I find the Grammarly extension very useful for checking my spelling and punctuation.
ReplyDeleteIn the first paragraph: "worshiped" should be "worshipped'
In the second paragraph: I think "Being" needs to be lowercase.
The images you put in your project was very informative as well! I never noticed he had a snake before. I also like that you put a video below. The layout of your website is so well-organized and easy to read! I might actually consider adding more pictures and videos to my page too. Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading your next story.
Thanks for the concern about the spelling issues. I did my best to produce this page without any errors. I have researched and addressed the two given problems below.
DeleteThe spelling of 'worshiped/worshipped" seems to be in violation of two different rules dependent on the one you pick. It seems to fall down to author's choice. Refer to the following links
http://www.future-perfect.co.uk/grammar-tip/is-it-worshipped-or-worshiped/
Or is is simply a difference between American or British English found here:
https://www.quora.com/Is-it-worshipped-or-worshiped
In regards to "supreme being/Supreme Being" I was following the idea that when referencing a deity of a religion then their name should be capitalized. As I had already said Shiva's name is was unnecessary for the phrase to be capitalized and I have fixed this.
Thank you for the feedback on the website!
Hey Logan,
ReplyDeleteWonderful job on the introduction page for your storybook! I particularly liked the layout of the page. I thought it flowed very smoothly. I think your storybook is going to be great! There’s a whole lot of content you could write on. Your introduction page introduced the subject very well and gave the reader a good amount of context that they will need to understand the rest of your stories. The pictures themselves conveyed a good amount of information effectively. A lot of pictures I’ve seen online for some of the Indian Epics are somewhat hard to understand, but I thought the ones you chose were good. One thing I’ll warn regarding your next stories is the layout of the page. It looks like you did an excellent job with this page, but it’s very easy to make things hard to read. So just keep that in mind when you create the rest of your stories!
Hey Logan! I commented on your storybook last week or maybe the week before. Sorry, I just now saw your reply to my comment. You have definitely done a lot of work on it, and it looks incredible! I love that you included more information on Ganesha's family. The pictures and videos really liven up the page, and keep it interesting. I think the writing of Ganesha's birth from his perspective was a very unique way of telling the story. I like that he has a little humor, too. You might consider putting your story through a spellchecker or rereading it because there were several little typos. I also wondered who Parvati was worried about walking in on her. You could add more about this. Did she have servants that might try to sneak a peek? Was she fighting with Shiva (perhaps about having children) and wanted to keep him away from her? Really nice job so far with everything, and I'm excited to see what else you do with this!
ReplyDeleteHey there Logan! How are you! Anyway, I just read your first story “Ganesha’s Origin Story” and it was really good and unique topic you took to write about Ganesha because we didn’t really talk about other gods other then the gods from Ramayana and Mahabharata so It really interesting to know that lot of people know about Hindu Gods. I like how you started Ganesha story with his origin story because not lot of people know how he was born and why does he have a head of elephant. I am Indian and also follow Hindu religion so I know the origin story of Ganesha and you did a good job telling about his birth to the reader. Other than that I really like your comment wall page design and layout because It easier for me to read the white text in black background. Anyway good topic and story.
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ReplyDeleteTo start, I'm excited that you chose to write about Ganesha and his family, that's almost the topic I chose for my storybook! There's so much to explore and tell so I think you'll be able to come up with several great stories. Your introduction did a really good job of laying out all the baseline information that the readers will need moving forward since we didn't talk much about Ganesha.
In reading "Ganesha's Origin Story," I immediately liked your storytelling style. I think it's really smart for it to be from Ganesha's point of view since he is, of course, a writer! It's neat to see him writing about himself rather than everyone else! I would recommend just reading back through the story out loud because there were a couple random typos and a couple times you switched verb tense, but you'll easily be able to solve that by just going through it another time!
Really great job, I look forward to hearing more about Ganesha!
Hello Logan! Your storybook is so fun! You did a really great job selecting images for each page. They made each page flow really well and the bright colors were exciting. The way you formatted your introduction was very helpful. The reader knows from the very beginning who the main characters are and some general background. It may be a good idea to add more characters to your introduction as you go along (that is if you add any more to your stories). I really like the writing style you chose for your first story "Ganesha's Birth." Will every story be written from his perspective or will other characters have their say? It may be cool to have a little dialogue between Shiva and Parvati thrown in somewhere. It could even be in a mocking tone, like Ganesha is making fun of his parents in some way. All in all, I think this is a great story and I'm excited to see what else you write!
ReplyDeleteHi Logan! What a fascinating topic for your Storybook! The way you formatted and wrote the Introduction was clear and I believe it put such an abundant amount of information into neat sections so that readers will not be overwhelmed with too much info written in massive paragraphs. The only comment I have to make about the Introduction was that actually explain what a vahana is before you explain Ganesha's own personal vahana. After I read your Introduction, I read the titles of the next stories and I was happy to see it went in like this chronological order similar to how you wrote the Introduction. Whether you meant to do that or not, it worked and is clever! The stories you have written are all well thought out and descriptive. It could be kind of interesting to see if you wanted to add comments from his parents to "Ganesha Origin Story" and comments from Kartikeya in "Ganesha's Brother." I think this could add a unique dynamic and perspective asides from Ganesha's. Overall, great Storybook thus far!
ReplyDeleteHey Logan, I just got done taking a look over your webpage here. I really liked the idea you had for your storybook! It shows your creativity very well! I also tip my hat to you on perusing a storybook project. I could tell form your writings and you web page that you have enjoyed the project and just thoroughly enjoyed it. I too did an origin story of sorts for my project. Your origin story was my favorite of your list of stories in your project. You always put so much description in all of your stories that made them very fun to read and kept the reader engaged. I am honestly not sure what I could tell you to better your site. You have a good introduction page that gives good detail, two great stories with a lot of description, and well thought out images to further instill ideas of each story. Great job and keep up the good work for the last bit of this semester.
ReplyDeleteHi Logan! I checked out your storybook. I think the pages have really nice layouts, and the pictures you put up fit very well. Anyways, reading through your introduction, I was glad you put up a lot of background information on Ganesha, since I haven't read about him much. Including the Vahanas was a nice little tidbit of interesting information. The language you wrote with gave Ganesha a casual, friendly kind of personality that makes the stories feel a bit more familiar, so instead of reading about a tale that happened long ago it feels more like someone's just telling you about stuff that happened to them. 'Ganesha's Brother' was also very interesting and fun to read. I don't have any complaints apart from changing "except" to "accept". These stories are very well written and some of the best I've seen so far IMO. Looking forward to reading some more!
ReplyDeleteHello Logan. The first thing I noticed was how detailed your project was. You clearly spent the time to layout your site. I like that you included some links and context on the home page. I was also surprised by the amount of images and links you included. This made it a lot more enjoyable to go through and read your stories. They also helped to explain and break down what you were saying. The video included on the page was also a nice touch. I also liked that you decided to focus on Ganesh, this was a topic I considered as well. My favorite part was how you narrated it from Ganesh's point of view. This made the stories more enjoyable. I especially enjoyed his explanation of how he came to have an elephant head. Really great work so far and am looking forward to seeing the finished project.
ReplyDeleteHey there, Logan! How are you! I really like your website it clean and easy to read. I especially like your image of Ganesha’s on Introduction it totally fits with the topic you chose to write. I think you have the most interesting and unique topic of the entire topic I read because we never really talked about Ganesha in this class. Your stories are really cool and easy to read. I especially really enjoyed reading your third story about Kartikeya and Ganesha story. I personally know the whole story because every time we had festival about Ganesha my parents would tell me really popular story of Ganesha such as this one where they compete to see is the fastest gods out of all the gods and Ganesha doesn’t use his strength and speed to win the race but his intelligent and that how he got to title of smartest god. It a good story keep it up.
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story. It was really informative, especially because Ganesha is such a popular image that I had seen before but never knew the symbolism or story behind. Your hard work on this storybook is very apparent because the website is well formatted and the information is well laid out. The introduction was my favorite because I learned so much. You did a great job researching the topic fully. I like that you are telling the story from Ganesha’s point of view. It adds real personality to the story as well as some humor like Ganesha not really knowing why he has the head of an elephant or the brotherly competition of wit. I also loved all the images throughout the story. This is really one of my favorite projects and I cannot wait to see how it all turns out! Keep up the great work!
Hi Logan! I’ve visited your storybook before and seen your intro and first story, so I’ll try to focus on the second story. I think this story did a very nice job of capturing not only Ganesha’s personality and wit, but also the dynamics of his family and home life. I also like how Parvati seemed to win this argument. While reading the Ramayana and Mahabharata, it felt like women and their opinions were rarely respected. This was a refreshing change. It seems that when Shiva made the challenge, he catered it to Kartikeya. Was this because Shiva favored him over Ganesha? And what was the significance of the mango? Was it really just a normal mango? I wouldn’t go very far for that either! Perhaps a golden mango or a mango that grants wishes would be a better motivator. Your story is really good as is, so no worries! Keep up the great work.
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your storybook! The first story really caught my attention because it is actually a story my mom told me as a child! It was quite refreshing to hear it from Ganesha's perspective and you gave him a personality that was really easy to relate to. I also really appreciated the hyperlink to trishula. Even though I knew what it was in general, it was nice to learn more about it and it probably helped those not familiar with the weapon. Some areas to expand the story would be to get Shiva and Parvati's reactions to the event. Like, how did Shiva react after realizing that it was his son? Or maybe how Parvati reacted to the elephant head. Overall, the story could use some more thought from each character to make it more personal. This would make it more your own rather than a retelling of the original story. Otherwise, fun story!
Hi Logan great job on your storybook so far! Your storybook is formatted really well. It is easy to navigate from story to story and the stories themselves are set up in a way that makes them easy to read. Your introduction does a great job of introducing Ganesha and explaining the different members of the family. The background provided makes me enjoy the stories a lot more and I do not find myself confused while reading them. Your first story does a great job of explaining how Ganesha came to be which is important for this storybook. One thing I would recommend in the second story is describing how Kartikeya came to be. Even small details would be really helpful in understanding little things about him. I really enjoyed reading the third story, but one thing I would like to read more about is the part of Shiva being stuck in the elephants stomach. I think it would make the story even more entertaining to read. Great job on the storybook so far, I look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteNice to meet you Logan!
ReplyDeleteI just finished up reading your story "Ganesha's Father", it was a very nice read. I love your whole theme for your storybook. I think I have read one of your other stories before reading this one. I did not know much about Shiva or Ganesha coming into your story so everything that happened was a complete surprise to me. The thought of a god being swallowed by an elephant being is truly hilarious and I can see why Ganesha found it so funny, although I am unsure as to why the elephant being swallowed Shiva in the first place. Was it because he loved Shiva so much he wanted him with him always? Or perhaps he was jealous of Shiva's power? I do not know, but it does not really make a deffierence in the grand scheme of your story. I hope you finish up another story so I can read it by the end of the semester.
Hello, Logan!
ReplyDeleteWhat an incredibly visual webpage you have crafted! I appreciate your use of Ganesha images as well as the easily navigable site. The Table of Contents in the introduction is helpful. For "Ganesha's Birth," I think narrating the story in Ganesha's perspective is unique. I would like to hear more about why you chose to retell this particular version of Ganesha's birth, since there are so many. I think the Author's Note is a great opportunity to tell your readers about your interests. In "Ganesha's Brother," I love how you included dialogue and a video about the Hindu calendar art. I think there are a couple of extra spaces in your post, however, that can be fixed by proofreading. Regardless, wonderful work!!!
Even before I knew who Ganesha was, when I was a child I loved him! I remember there was a picture of him in one of my encyclopedias and I drew him and his many arms in crayon. I think there’s something inherently lovable about elephants and he seemed so magical!
ReplyDeleteThank you for creating the introduction with all that great info. It’s a great start!
I smiled SO much throughout your stories! They’re informal yet informative, playful yet never crossing into campy, winking condescension. I could almost see Ganesha sitting, legs crossed, leaning in to tell me the story of his life. That part about him being the most “perfect, handsome, flashing, smart, intelligent, friendly...” was super cute.
I adored the story of the mango competition. So charming! Also, how smart is Ganesha?? Way to play the game! I would’ve been pretty upset too, if I’d been Kartikeya. Like, bruh I LITERALLY just flew around the world three times and someone better give me a mango.
Hello, nice to meet you Logan!
ReplyDeleteI just finished up looking through your story book about Genesha's home life, and I must say this was a brilliant idea to do your semester project over. There is a lot of material and stories that you could build off of. I also enjoyed how for your introduction you gave insight into who and what Genesha is for those who have not read or learned about him. Most other storybooks give insight into their actual stories in their introduction, which can be helpful sometimes, but the way you built up who Genesha is and what his family is like is a much better way to introduce your storybook, in my opinion at least. As far as your stories go, I like that each one focuses on different family members within Genesha's life. Maybe if you have one more project assignment you could finish it out with a story over his mother.
Hello Logan! I just read through all of your stories and I have to say that they were very well written! I really liked the way you set up your site as well. The way the text would occasionally change sides of the screen made the reading process a lot more interesting and engaging. I loved that the introduction to your story was very in depth and provided a lot of background information necessary to fully appreciate your stories. You could have just tried to shoe-horn this information into your stories, but you chose to instead provide them in an easily accessible format. I also thought that the way you focused each story on a different member of Genesha's family, specifically himself his brother and his father. I would have liked one on his mother as well just to complete the set, but overall it was a cool angle to play as far as splitting up your stories and I thought it was done quite well.
ReplyDeleteHey Logan! You have one of the best websites I've visited as a part of this class. Your front page layout is superb and does a really good job of letting the reader know what it is all about and to get them interested. The small explanations under each story are really helpful and give context to people when they start to read them. They give a small enough teaser to get people interested but don't give the story away, which is nice. The pictures you use are really well selected as well. They compliment each other and bring a nice vibrance to the page. I really like your first story after the introduction. You do a really good job of describing Ganesha from their own perspective, which is super cool. It sounds like someone reminiscing about their mother and the stories she would tell of Ganesha's birth and it adds a whole new perspective to the story. Overall, really good job and I'm happy to have read your project.
ReplyDeleteHey Logan, really good job on the structure of your website! The placement of your images throughout your story book keeps it interesting. Also, this layout gives the reader access to additional information easily. You did a great job of providing additional information especially in your introduction. You did a great job creating a character tone out of Ganesh. Using his own origin story was a great way to do this because it set up his narration tone early. I think the first person voice you used during your stories also helped with the tone. It helped the reader feel more connected to the story you were telling. I also loved the little bits of humor you sprinkled in to your stories. One thing I you might change is adding some dialog into some of your stories. It think it would help give some of the other characters personality. Really great job on these and good luck with the rest of the semester!
ReplyDeleteHey Logan! First of all, weird how I have been in both semesters of this class format and I have never seen a Table of Contents on the first page. I loved how you gave a little blurb about each page so I really felt comfortable with what I was getting into! I think the biggest thing you could do to really improve your storybook would just be finding the narrator's voice in the introduction. After reading the introduction which read like a Wikipedia page, I was a little surprised it switched tons so suddenly to a familiar Ganesha voice. Perhaps Ganesha could also give the introduction or there could be more of a transition between the intro and first page? Or the narrator is someone who knows Ganesha personally so they are about to introduce Ganesha, but they're giving fair warning. Other than that, great work! I hope you enjoyed your semester in the class and happy summer!
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